That’s the weekend goal. It need four scenes
- Some monster needs to be killed, hacked into bits, and the best parts brought back for dinner. That sentence, with “ZZZ” in front of it, is all there is. Most of the monsters have been mutated existing things. Maybe it’s time to discover something really monster-y. There are n00bs, so someone needs to be injured.
- The secret of ranged magic must be discovered. This one has a sketchy outline. It will happen between returning with monster parts and eating them. For those you who are not following the magic discussion, one does not manifest a spell then throw it. One manifests a spell at the target. They haven’t figured this out, yet.
- Dinner. This doesn’t need to be a “scene”, but after getting the best monster parts and playing with magic while they’re being cooked, they do need to eat them, at least expositionally. “Do you have a grill?” “Yes, but no propane.” “Let’s build a firepit” Stop talking about it!(*)
- The group needs to split up for the night. It’s a short scene, but it’s more than the four sentences that are there now. The final scene, which is already written, requires this.
- Something needs to fill the time between dinner and separate-for-night. If I’m super-lucky(*), a couple of paragraphs can deal with these last three things.
And some back-edits to put in things I forgot.
- Our intrepid puppies (Quin, Rick, Juan, and Larry) have weapons, which are not mentioned once. Leaving them on the porch at the beginning is good enough, but they need to be mentioned. Hah! They line up in a narrow space to be introduced. Perfect time to have a n00b w/scabbard issue. One down! (or least solved). And then pick them back up before going off to kill the monster. That’s enough.
- Lupa, our sidekick wolf, disappears for this chapter. I either need to put her in or give some excuse about where she goes.
I’m tired of being stuck on this chapter. 19, 20, and 21 are done. 22 is getting there. 23 is building up. 18 shall fall before me!
Why, yes, this post is entirely a “Go Mark!” motivational to-do list.
It doesn’t split well. It’s all one day with all the same people. It’s just going to be long.
(*) Have you seen Hello Dolly!? I can’t figure out if it is purposefully over-the-top or if it’s the apotheosis of The Musical. Everyone is always singing instead of getting on with it. The restaurant scene is the worst. The wait-staff dances around – while singing, of course – with the meals on trays instead of just bringing food to the table, as normal wait-staff do. I feel like my characters do this with dialog. Just shut up and let me summarize! No one wants all this chatter. Give me my food, already!
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